Did you ever wish you could wake up to find yourself on another celestial body? To meet creatures you never dreamed existed? To ma ically understand every word of their bizarre lan ua e? And to join forces with them to figh the dark forces of the universe? Cissi the elephant does all of this in Moons of Shambala, my 80,000 word debut middle rade novel.
I am thrilled to submit "Moons of Shambala" for your perusal. It has the amazing potential to be the next Harry Potter, and I'm sure that
I have taken the liberty of translating the story into Shambalian (a lan ua e I have created over the past ei ht years), and I have included the first few pa es for your deli ht and entertainment. (Please excuse the missin --letter between f and h--my keyboard is missin that key.)
I look forward to hearin your enthusiastic response.
Moons of Shambala
Cissi rolled over. She couldn't et comfortable. The cushion felt lumpy and she squirmed. Then she si hed and opened her eyes. No way to sleep, she thought rumpily, as she rolled to her side and lumbered to her feet.
Cissi rubbed her eyes with her trunk and looked around. She asped. Nothing looked right. Her cushion was a rock! Cissi swung her reat head from side to side and spotted a blue and white orb in the sky. She asped again. It was Earth!
Wait, she thought. Am I on the moon? Is this a dream? She rubbed her eyes a ain and blinked furiously. She pinched her ear with the end of her trunk.
"Ow!" Nope, I uess I'm not dreamin . Now what?
As Cissi stood helplessly in the reat crater, she heard a sound. She turned to see some purple creatures with antennae and five le s walking toward her. Their iant compound eyes reflected the li ht of the earth, litterin as they came nearer.
"¤Þξ æ Ð§¤ω," the leader said as they drew near.
Cissi was amazed that she understood. "ζÝ," she replied. The leader lanced at a slightly taller individual to his left and they nodded.
"ζÝ ξÐæ," he said, and the Shambalans turned to leave. Cissi followed behind, curious to know how they thou ht she could help.
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